1. What is the difference between a hard news lead and the one you read?
In the story it started with "That voice" and repeated many times instead of being one paragraph that is similar to a thesis statement.
2. In which paragraphs did you learn the following information?
Who? Ted Williams, Paragraph 2
What? Williams singing talent, Paragraph 3
Where? New York, Hudson Street, Paragraph 2
When? January 5th, 2011
Why? People noticed he had an amazing voice and wanted to pay him to work for them, paragraph 13
How? He used to listen to radio as a kid and learned that voice is all a thing of the mind.
3. Are there any quotes in the story?
Yes there are quotes in the story
4. Are those quotes arranged in "Quote transition style"?
No, its not every other like it should be but there are parts where it seems as it is
5. Who is quoted in the story?
William, Kevins Boss, Kevin, Doral, Ken, Tony, Frank
6. What quote is the most powerful in the story?
"We could make him a millionaire." Is the quote I like the most because it shows the amount of potential this guy has up his sleeve and the opportunities that are coming his way.
7. How many paragraphs are in the story?
There are 33 paragraphs in the story.
8. How many words are in the story?
763 Words are in the story.
9. What is significant about the lead and the last sentence of the story?
They both involve the phrase "That voice" which I already talked about how it appears many times and conveys the theme that this guy has some extreme talent.
10. Why do you think the writer did that?
I think the writer wanted us to be aware, to know that we may ave already heard this guys voice but not even known it yet. Also I think he uses the word that instead of William because he's trying to show how the talent does not define who William is. He defines what the talent will become of him, and that everyone has a gift, even people others look down on and pass by everyday.
11. Was the story interesting to read?
I thought that the story was quite interesting to read.
12. Before you watched the video did you want to hear his voice?
Yes, It was kind of nagging me to go listen to his voice.
13. What impact did the video have?
Putting a face to the person being described of having the voice of an angel really helped me understand the story more and to appreciate the voice of this individual.
14. Would the story have lost its impact without the video?
No, I think that the story would still have been just as interesting without the video and that people would have took their own time to look the guy up because the story pulled them in. I know I would have even if the video wasn't included in the story.
15. Did they author try to describe the voice?
I would say partially because he only used on adjective to describe the way it actually sounds but when he spoke of it he used positive and uplifting diction to infer that he has a great voice.
16. How did he do that?
The author was very smart in the way he wrote the story by slowly lowering you in without telling you too much and giving you all the information you wanted, so you kept reading looking for what made you read the story in the first place.
Friday, November 13, 2015
Tuesday, November 10, 2015
Second Opinion Piece Peer Review
Peer Review #1
1. Who wrote the story?
Aaron F, wrote the story.
2. What is their story about?
Aarons story is about Kendrick Lamar and J.Cole, and his opinions on them and their music.
3. What is their opinion about the topic?
His opinion is that Kendrick Lamar is the better rapper but they are both great regardless.
4. Did they address what the other side thought about the topic?
Yes, they addressed both sides very well.
5. Were they wishy washy with their opinion?
No, they were not wishy washy and conveyed their opinion very clearly.
6. Are there any quotes?
There are no quotes in the story.
7. What point of view did they write in?
1st person
8. Can you tell if this person was writing an editorial or a straight commentary piece?
I was able to easily tell it was a personal column.
Peer Review #2
1. Who wrote the story?
Darcy K wrote the story.
2. What is their story about?
Her story is on the unhealthy aspect of Social Media.
3. What is their opinion about the topic?
Darcy's opinion is that some aspects of social media are beneficial but their are more that are harmful.
4. Did they address what the other side thought about the topic?
She addressed what the other side thought of the topic.
5. Were they wishy washy with their opinion?
No she was not wishy washy with her opinion.
6. Are there any quotes?
There are no quotes in the story.
7. What point of view did they write in?
The story is written in first person.
8. Can you tell if this person was writing an editorial or a straight commentary piece?
It was quite easy to identify that she was writing a normal opinions piece.
1. Who wrote the story?
Aaron F, wrote the story.
2. What is their story about?
Aarons story is about Kendrick Lamar and J.Cole, and his opinions on them and their music.
3. What is their opinion about the topic?
His opinion is that Kendrick Lamar is the better rapper but they are both great regardless.
4. Did they address what the other side thought about the topic?
Yes, they addressed both sides very well.
5. Were they wishy washy with their opinion?
No, they were not wishy washy and conveyed their opinion very clearly.
6. Are there any quotes?
There are no quotes in the story.
7. What point of view did they write in?
1st person
8. Can you tell if this person was writing an editorial or a straight commentary piece?
I was able to easily tell it was a personal column.
Peer Review #2
1. Who wrote the story?
Darcy K wrote the story.
2. What is their story about?
Her story is on the unhealthy aspect of Social Media.
3. What is their opinion about the topic?
Darcy's opinion is that some aspects of social media are beneficial but their are more that are harmful.
4. Did they address what the other side thought about the topic?
She addressed what the other side thought of the topic.
5. Were they wishy washy with their opinion?
No she was not wishy washy with her opinion.
6. Are there any quotes?
There are no quotes in the story.
7. What point of view did they write in?
The story is written in first person.
8. Can you tell if this person was writing an editorial or a straight commentary piece?
It was quite easy to identify that she was writing a normal opinions piece.
Friday, November 6, 2015
CE# 3.1
1. They want to ban the flag from the parade because the confederate flag is a political symbol of hatred and racism.
2. The teen discovered his true identity when applying to a college and noticed a fault in his social security number.
3. The students have to climb a ladder so they can cut down on the 1.5 mile walk they would have to trek otherwise.
4. Whole foods is an organic food distributer, Amplify is in the Healthy Snack Distribution business, Home Away is in the Travel Business.
5. Donio is on a mission to make tech more appealing to women, she's sharing her story with the world and teaching woman what it is they can achieve.
2. The teen discovered his true identity when applying to a college and noticed a fault in his social security number.
3. The students have to climb a ladder so they can cut down on the 1.5 mile walk they would have to trek otherwise.
4. Whole foods is an organic food distributer, Amplify is in the Healthy Snack Distribution business, Home Away is in the Travel Business.
5. Donio is on a mission to make tech more appealing to women, she's sharing her story with the world and teaching woman what it is they can achieve.
DOING WITHOUT
This story is a editorial about to choose a life of simplicity rather than unnecessary and pointless complexity. In this story brooks informs about the perspectives of people in todays world and how they can change them to improve their life style. He talks about how its funny that the most simple solution to a less stressful and simpler life seems so complex to everyone, when its simply, the choice of simplicity. David speaks of other people and groups in the past who lived with this mindset, like the quakers. Informing of how people who chose to live without unnecessary things lived and what they were able to achieve. I think that the article was titled from the right because people on the left side may have a different perspective on the opinion and will be compared to that of the people on the right. Davids point was pretty solid but I don't agree completely with it. I do believe that their are a lot of things we choose to place in our lives that are pointless and it would be better if we didn't have them. But at the same time life shouldn't be simple, thats the whole adventure of it, to go and be in a complex situation you have to get yourself out of. Life is meant to be meaningful and having an intent purpose, not a day to day simple motion, a complex structure supporting the truest version of yourself.
Wednesday, November 4, 2015
Cell Phone Addiction Editorial
The world today is so connected, instant access to the information of the whole world. Almost everyone has practically the entire knowledge of the human race, in their pocket, on a little device that we call a cell phone. This device is the swiss army knife of all tools, its communication, entertainment, information, and the longer its being used the smarter it gets. This technology is greatly appreciated throughout the world, but at the same time a lot of people share the same opinion that it hurts us in some cases more than it is good for us. We are so connected to one another by our devices that we are truly disconnected in reality. By becoming connected, and having constant knowledge of the lives of friends and family, we became severely disconnected, and see them only as people on a screen.
Cell phones have changed the world in many great, and some horrible aspects. One that stands out, is people on their phones while they are driving. Their distraction leads to a instant consequence that is sometimes fatal. Another is when people are simply walking, and they can't put their phone down. Here at bowie its a common sight to see people walking in the hallways with their heads pointed down at their device, and to see them bump into others.
Phones have become the super highway for social life, the way to constantly know what everyone else is doing. Meaning that the "social ranking system" is very different in schools now. When something happens people know all about it within minutes, meaning any mistake actions that students make, are instantly known and gossiped about. Students are constantly using their phones to stay connected to one another to see where they are in the "ranks", and who is talking about them.
A common stereotype is that its only girls, who live their life connected to their devices like this, but thats not the truth. It is more common to see a girl on social media more often than a guy, but not more often for either gender to be disengaged from the environment around them and on their phone. Guys tend to have a problem of playing games on their phone rather than being on social media. Both are quite pointless though, games give nothing in life but satisfaction and take in time, Social Media causes stress and takes up a lot of time as well.
This is quite fixable though, its called choosing priorities. The world needs to recognize that this addiction to a screen is ruining their lives, and distracting everyone from the adventure that awaits them. The world needs to become more disconnected to become reconnected again. Social Media and Texting, shouldn't be the only 2 things people see of each other. To become less addicted to cellphones everyone needs to become more addicted to life itself, and to choose a life of adventure and true living rather than spending your life living on a screen.
Cell phones have changed the world in many great, and some horrible aspects. One that stands out, is people on their phones while they are driving. Their distraction leads to a instant consequence that is sometimes fatal. Another is when people are simply walking, and they can't put their phone down. Here at bowie its a common sight to see people walking in the hallways with their heads pointed down at their device, and to see them bump into others.
Phones have become the super highway for social life, the way to constantly know what everyone else is doing. Meaning that the "social ranking system" is very different in schools now. When something happens people know all about it within minutes, meaning any mistake actions that students make, are instantly known and gossiped about. Students are constantly using their phones to stay connected to one another to see where they are in the "ranks", and who is talking about them.
A common stereotype is that its only girls, who live their life connected to their devices like this, but thats not the truth. It is more common to see a girl on social media more often than a guy, but not more often for either gender to be disengaged from the environment around them and on their phone. Guys tend to have a problem of playing games on their phone rather than being on social media. Both are quite pointless though, games give nothing in life but satisfaction and take in time, Social Media causes stress and takes up a lot of time as well.
This is quite fixable though, its called choosing priorities. The world needs to recognize that this addiction to a screen is ruining their lives, and distracting everyone from the adventure that awaits them. The world needs to become more disconnected to become reconnected again. Social Media and Texting, shouldn't be the only 2 things people see of each other. To become less addicted to cellphones everyone needs to become more addicted to life itself, and to choose a life of adventure and true living rather than spending your life living on a screen.
Monday, November 2, 2015
Editorials and Personal Collumns
1. My first idea is to have a editorial would be about the way people respond to certain situations, like a fight or flight editorial.
2. The second idea I thought would be interesting is the fashion choice of people here at bowie. It seems as if no one here has the same style and everyone kinda has their own twist on everything. I think this is really cool, but at the same time, the style of some people is just plain disturbing.
3. The last idea I thought would be good to write about was the heavy rain on friday that created the early ending and pointless day of school.
A columinst that I read on a regular basis is my friends blog. She is currently embarked on the world race where she is completing a variety of missions and going on many adventures to change the lives of others and the world itself. Her blog is fantastic and really helps you understand the way she is feeling at the time due to the conditions she is in and the things she is having to deal with. Her style of writing is very casual but at the same time quite energetic and interesting.
2. The second idea I thought would be interesting is the fashion choice of people here at bowie. It seems as if no one here has the same style and everyone kinda has their own twist on everything. I think this is really cool, but at the same time, the style of some people is just plain disturbing.
3. The last idea I thought would be good to write about was the heavy rain on friday that created the early ending and pointless day of school.
A columinst that I read on a regular basis is my friends blog. She is currently embarked on the world race where she is completing a variety of missions and going on many adventures to change the lives of others and the world itself. Her blog is fantastic and really helps you understand the way she is feeling at the time due to the conditions she is in and the things she is having to deal with. Her style of writing is very casual but at the same time quite energetic and interesting.
Peer Reflection 2
1. Who wrote the story?
1. Austyn Keelty
2. What is their story about?
2. Gender Discrimination.
3.What is their direct opinion on that topic?
3. She talks about how Females are discriminated against in many different ways and her opinion on the topic.
4.Did they address what the other side might think about that topic?
4. Sorda, there isn't really another side for this topic, they aren't generally people against gender
equality. But she does cover other people opinions on what the situation is like right now.
5. Were they "wishy washy' with their opinion statements?
5. She was not "wishy washy" and clearly provided her opinion and the general opinion of other females through her writing.
6. Are there any quotes in the story?
6. There are no quotes in this story.
7. What view is the story written in?
7. The story is written in first person.
1. Austyn Keelty
2. What is their story about?
2. Gender Discrimination.
3.What is their direct opinion on that topic?
3. She talks about how Females are discriminated against in many different ways and her opinion on the topic.
4.Did they address what the other side might think about that topic?
4. Sorda, there isn't really another side for this topic, they aren't generally people against gender
equality. But she does cover other people opinions on what the situation is like right now.
5. Were they "wishy washy' with their opinion statements?
5. She was not "wishy washy" and clearly provided her opinion and the general opinion of other females through her writing.
6. Are there any quotes in the story?
6. There are no quotes in this story.
7. What view is the story written in?
7. The story is written in first person.
Peer Reflection 1
1. Who wrote the story?
1. Alyssa A wrote the opinion piece.
1. Who wrote the story?
2. The story is about her opinion on dress codes and what she thinks can be done to fix the problem.
3. What is their direct opinion about that topic? Please quote it directly from the story or do a really good job of paraphrasing.
3. "Dress code should either be banished or reduced to a couple rules. By doing so, students will be able to express themselves and their individuality through clothing. " Alyssa said.
5. Were they wishy-washy with their opinion? By this I mean did they every go back and say well maybe if this were to happen, then their opinion wouldn't be valid. Support your opinion.
5. Alyssa was not very wishy washy which was good, and got out her point very clearly while conveying to the reader her opinion of the whole situation.
6. Are there any quotes in the story?
6. There are no quotes in the story.
7. What point of view was the story written in?
7. She wrote the story in 1st person.
1. Alyssa A wrote the opinion piece.
1. Who wrote the story?
2. The story is about her opinion on dress codes and what she thinks can be done to fix the problem.
3. What is their direct opinion about that topic? Please quote it directly from the story or do a really good job of paraphrasing.
3. "Dress code should either be banished or reduced to a couple rules. By doing so, students will be able to express themselves and their individuality through clothing. " Alyssa said.
4. Did they address what the other side might think about their topic?
4. Yes, she addressed what parents and other students think about dress codes.5. Were they wishy-washy with their opinion? By this I mean did they every go back and say well maybe if this were to happen, then their opinion wouldn't be valid. Support your opinion.
5. Alyssa was not very wishy washy which was good, and got out her point very clearly while conveying to the reader her opinion of the whole situation.
6. Are there any quotes in the story?
6. There are no quotes in the story.
7. What point of view was the story written in?
7. She wrote the story in 1st person.
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